I wrote this poem while at the Young Writers at Kenyon summer program. Other high school writers gave me advice. Often I ask my mom, who is a writer, to read and comment on my poems. She's more willing to criticize because she isn't so afraid of offending me. It's important to have an outsider's perspective, I think, to see what other people get from your poem. Also, they might hate a certain line you thought was OK, or love a line you weren't so sure about. It's kind of fascinating.

Editor's Comments:
Delia chooses some perfect verbs in this poem: clouds, urges, lifted, presses, blink, inching. The description of the action, the verb choice, and the simile of the steam "like the breath of a boy on a winter window" give this poem a unique voice. Delia describes a moment that many of us have had - falling asleep in a car - but she does it with originality.